It is in Japanese which has a much more compact syllabic structure and thus conveys with sparseness. With English language haiku it’s common to use different rules like a 2-3-2 stressed beat or a less than but up to 17 syllables (if it sounds right.) English has some very STRETCHED out syllables, such as – for example – “stretched.” You can easily end up with a poem with none of the sparsity of the Japanese form.
However, I would accept as critique that this is probably more of a Senryu than a haiku and that it lacks a season word or phrase, if you want to get technical.
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we have these ducks at our park. Regarding a haiku, I believe the most common format is 5 – 7–5. Cute pick
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It is in Japanese which has a much more compact syllabic structure and thus conveys with sparseness. With English language haiku it’s common to use different rules like a 2-3-2 stressed beat or a less than but up to 17 syllables (if it sounds right.) English has some very STRETCHED out syllables, such as – for example – “stretched.” You can easily end up with a poem with none of the sparsity of the Japanese form.
However, I would accept as critique that this is probably more of a Senryu than a haiku and that it lacks a season word or phrase, if you want to get technical.
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